SAMPLE SENTENCES FOR CONCLUSIONS

b) This essay has outlined/evaluated/discussed/analysed/examined……

It has emerged that…………………………………

c) However as discussed above….

In order to solve……………………………….has great potential.

d) It is necessary to explore …………………… in order to understand……………………………more fully/in more depth

e) It would be interesting to examine how/why/where/when/what/who.......................................

f) Although only two kinds of……………/case studies/cities/countries have been examined in this work, other……………………………are advantageous/are useful/ have solutions/have benefits

Nevertheless, even if ……………… it is not easy to……………….

NEW ASSESSED ESSAY TITLE

“Identify and analyse the key problems of urbanisation and suggest and evaluate solutions which would form part of a policy of sustainable development”

minimum 2 sources from book, minimum 2 external sources (1 book and 1 journal), 2 websites maximum –reputable (English Language only). 

Introduction Checklist

Is it likely to interest the reader? Why?- INTRODUCTION TO TOPIC?

Background information?

Does it start with a general statement related to the topic and gradually become more specific?

Is there a thesis statement that tells the reader what the essay will be about?  Can you easily identify it?

Does the introduction give an overview of the essay structure?

Are ideas clearly linked between sentences or is it sometimes confusing?

Does it include a definition? Do you think a definition is necessary or would be helpful?

Purpose/Justification…What do you want to show/tell/explain?

Sample Evaluations of Case Studies Part 2

Wind power (renewable green power)

Traditional power, such as fossil fuels, will make pollution and eventually destroy our environment.  In contrast Green Power just uses natural power, for example wind, water and sun can be transferred into energy by various machines to create power.  It is more convenient to collect renewable energy because it uses minimal human resources once the machine is installed.  On the other hand in mountainous and isolated areas it is more difficult to gain access to the grid.  Moreover Green Power needs progressive technology, which means for most people it is unaffordable.

Limited House Purchasing in Shanghai

The policy of the limited house purchase scheme is suitable for big and modern cities, like Shanghai.  This is because there are lots of immigrants who buy more houses, which increases house prices.  Therefore this policy would control the price and quantity of new houses being built.  Moreover, if people do not invest in houses, they will but other products, such as food and clothing, and this can improve the economy.  However this policy is not justified for non-local people who really need a house to live in.

Essay question to be completed by Monday 30th July

Discuss the problems of safety and security in big cities.

Outline the different types of energy sources and discuss their advantages and disadvantages.

Choose one of these questions using the guidelines given to you.

to include at least any three-3 sources- 1 book, 1 internet, 1 film

Example Introductions om Traffic Congestion

People take 1 hour 32 minutes a day to travel to work in Beijing (IT Home, 2012). Maybe it is time to build a new public transport system to help reduce travel times. This essay will focus on the advantages and disadvantages of a new sky cable car system, which has been successful in South America.

Why does traffic congestion have a big impact on people’s lives?  Noise and pollution should be reduced by governments improving transportation in big cities. This essay will focus on the advantages and disadvantages of the licence plate limitation scheme in Beijing.

 “Drivers in UK owe a staggering $270 million in congestion charges” (Autoblog, 2012).  Probably charging fees from the driver directly from the car may improve the situation.  This essay will discuss the advantages and disadvantages of charging fees in London and Paris

“Traffic congestion is a condition of road networks that occurs as use increases and is characterised by slower speeds, longer trip times and increased vehicle queueing” (Wikipedia, 2012).  It is probably going to take a long time to stop traffic jams in all big cities. This essay will talk about three points, the reason congestion happens and how to reduce it in modern cities in China.

There are already 4.7 million cars on Beijing streets and that number is expected/predicted to double by 2015 if the government does not take action (Forbes, 2010).  Possibly the government should limit people buying cars to reduce traffic congestion.  This essay will focus on the reasons why such a system will or will not work in Beijing and Hong Kong.

Introduction question Homework Monday 23rd July

Outline the different types of energy sources and discuss their advantages and disadvantages.

Discuss the problems of safety and security in big cities.

Choose one of these questions and write your introduction using the guidelines given to you. Minimum 3 sentences.

Look at the example introductions available on this blog